T hough tears almost dry,
R adiance alters to cry,
Y ield's only dropping by,
I nsanity teases with shy,
N ightmare deprives calmness,
G naws conscience leaves mindless,
T ime shows the tamer of horses, Hector,
O r Achilles, the greatest Greek warrior.
B eing remembered for the brave behavior.
E xemplary figures that never fade forever.
S uccess doesn't come freely,
O bstacles will stop your odyssey,
M ourning star covers how far you see,
E nemies' envy will kill you slowly.
B ut always be the best you can be,
O ptimistic and think positively,
D o not surrender your dignity,
Y ou’ll soon be somebody.
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Nice poem,,,walau kesannya agak mikir...but btw, how to make a good poem sir?
ReplyDeleteThanks
Deleteevery person has its own opinion ok :)
good or not is not our domain to think, the point here is just make the literary work as good as u can and then let the rest to the reader to enjoy and judge.
Great work
ReplyDeleteI like it
Terus berkarya bro
klu menurutku sih buat puisi tu gampang2 susah banyak faktor yang mempengaruhi untuk menghasilkan inspirasi, pas sedih, seneng, kecewa, dll. intinya tergantung mood kita.
ReplyDeletePuisinya asyik sir. :)
betul banget
Deletedengan membaca kita mengenal dunia
ReplyDeletedengan tulisan kita dikenal oleh dunia
zaman sekarang yang kita butuhkan emang suri tauladan yang baik...tu yg mnrutQ surah sangat langka
bagus sekali kata2nya
Deleteu're right, that's the only thing that our people needs
nice poem
ReplyDeleteBisa bantu analisa chariot by Emily Dickinson ga???
ReplyDeletecoba deh ikuti link ini:
Deletehttp://awinlanguage.blogspot.com/2012/02/lives-like-loaded-guns-emily-dickinson.html
Ini inspirasinya dari film Troy ya Sir?
ReplyDeleteJadi ingat lagunya Goerge Groban, 'Remember'
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